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I am almost done with my current piece. I need help laying out my piece and sorting what should be in each paragraph. I think I have sorted it well but I just need your opinion. I think the best part of my piece would have to be the introduction because I feel the lead is strong and the whole paragraph flows well.

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They both are quotes for a leads. They also go straight to the point.

The first ones problem is that it isn't worded right and could be written differently.

The second one should not have that they say has changed everything. Its just an extra to the lead that makes it look to long. It would sound a lot better.

The third one just goes straight to the point but I don't really understand their point that much. I don't get if the article is going to talk about the teachers or the children.

Warm Up - Leads

•   Every push and shove and long line wait was worth it to get their hands on the new and improved IPhone 4 from Verizon that they say has changed everything.

I choose this for my lead because I though it sounded good with my piece. It explains what I'm talking about and at the same time adds a creative twist to the lead.

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Jessica S. - "Obesity just isn't something you can ignore.  Something needs to change."

What do you think would be a good change to the child's lifestyle? 


"I think there could possibly be other easier solutions." 

What would other solutions be? If you were the obese child's parent what would you insist to help them out. 

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Keegan L. - " I think that's its unfair to blame the parents for something the kids did to themselves. At the same time I think that the kids should be helped out before it becomes worse.

Mariah Oelke- " I think that the parents deserve to be punished for letting the kids become obese and not helping them out or putting them on a diet. Its very irresponsible to let the child become obese because it could really effect his life. "

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I don't think that that it would be fair to take the child away from the parents. The child could be getting fat on his or her own. It could be the parents fault that they never teaching the kids the effects of a junk food life style, but I don't think they should be taken away from their kids for it. I don't think they should be taken away but maybe get taught what the effects are and how to start to reduce his or her obesity. Kids taken away from parents who are acholic or druggies is whole different story because the kids are in harm by the parents, but obese child are just harming themselves and the kids should be taught what to eat and not. The child would be punished more then the parents if they are going to be taken away from their own home. Also, chilidren could become fat over genetics. Then still if the parents are doing nothing to help their child they should be punished. So to me this is a yes and no subject.

Articles:http://www.independent.co.uk/news/uk/home-news/fattest-children-to-be-taken-away-from-their-parents-898972.html

http://www.associatedcontent.com/article/2294263/children_being_taken_away_from_parents.html?cat=25

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For missing the workshop I think that I could write an essay on why I missed it, or write an essay to you on journalism and how to become a better journalist. Or any kind of essay of some sort. Even maybe help you out in the library.

Vocabullary Building

1.)  PLHS students attended a 2:00 assembly about life after collage.


3.)  I resembled the blocks back together.

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How long is the regular publishing cycle?
Do they have a separate job for photographers?
Do you have to be very experienced to get a job as a journalist?
Is it better to be a journalist apart of newspaper or online?
What is your favorite part about journalism?
In writing a good lead is it bad to use a question as a lead?