They both are quotes for a leads. They also go straight to the point.
The first ones problem is that it isn't worded right and could be written differently.
The second one should not have that they say has changed everything. Its just an extra to the lead that makes it look to long. It would sound a lot better.
The third one just goes straight to the point but I don't really understand their point that much. I don't get if the article is going to talk about the teachers or the children.
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